I'll warn you now, I have been said to have an unusual writing style so... just don't expect too much, okay?! I'm doing this because I really want to contribute and earn my faction some points... it may have been quite fun to do as well. ;3 I'll leave a linky at the bottom of this post so all you other initiates can share the links to your own Divergent fan fiction too! :D
DISCLAIMER: These characters and setting and stuffness do not belong to me, I didn't come up with any of them, the wonderful, talented Veronica Roth did! ALSO, my fan fiction does reveal a minor event in the book, so if you haven't read it and want to go into it knowing absolutely nothing, maybe don't read on. ;P
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She looked so
weak, so small, like if you were to brush against her, even if just for a
second, she’d crumple to the ground like a scrunched up paper bag.
I was standing to her left. Two
metres or so of gravel separating us. She wasn’t remarkable looking in any way;
her ordinary, blonde hair was pulled back, wispy, dull blonde strands framing
her ordinary face.
It had been surprising to a lot of
people – me included - when she’d chose Dauntless. She didn’t hold herself with
assurance and purpose, nor did she give off an air of defiance. She was too
fragile, too bland, too Stiff. The only thing that made you question her façade
were her eyes. They were curious, holding a spark of something that had not yet
found its way to burn.
Maybe she’d find what she was
searching for in Dauntless. I doubted it though.
Until she stepped forward.
I wasn’t expecting it, neither was
Peter. He barely repressed a growl. He lived for the weak, the spirits he could
toy with until they finally snapped, shattering like sugar glass around his
feet. I had spent most of my childhood hiding from him, acting like I was his
loyal slave so he wouldn’t hurt me. He had a strange power over me, one that
refused to grant an escape route. I was a coward. But Dauntless would change that.
They would make me strong. They would make me worthy.
She walked up to the edge, her
movements controlled, her face devoid of any fear. The spark was already
igniting.
Peter cracked a joke, already trying
to assert his dominance, his superiority. There were a few sniggers, mainly
from Molly and Drew. For her sake, I hoped he’d get bored quickly, focus in on
some other poor, precarious soul and grant her a reprieve.
She unclasped her loose-fitting
shirt and threw it in his direction. It hit him directly in the centre of his
chest.
His eyes locked in on her, his jaw clenching.
Turning back around, she planted
both legs beside one another and bent her knees. One heartbeat. Two heartbeats.
She jumped.
All of us ran to the edge and
watched as her small frame disappeared into the black hole. I don’t know what
we expected. A loud thunk as her body
hit solid ground? A scream? Nothing.
“Who’s next?”
Christina stepped forward and, after
two exasperated breaths, jumped.
I watched as all the other initiates
clambered up to the ledge, one after the other, and disappeared, then:
“You. Al, is it? Move."
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*hides face* WHO'S EXCITED FOR THE UK RELEASE OF DIVERGENT TOMORROW?!
Happy Reading,
Rachel xoxo
PS: Linky will be coming shortly!
AMAZING. OHHHH AMAZING
ReplyDeleteOH MY LORD BOTH YOU ARE SOPHIE ARE BLOODY LEGENDS AT WRITING? I FELT LIKE THIS COULD ACTUALLY HAVE BEEN DIVERGENT FROM FOUR'S PERSPECTIVE WRITTEN BY VROTH! CAN U TELEPORT UR WRITING SKILLS?
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ZOMG THIS IS SO GOOD STOP HIDING YOUR FACE YOU POOP. :P also i really want to do this but i've never done it before and IDK WHAT TO DO I DO WHAT DO I WRITE ABOUT?
ReplyDeleteOMG this was actually so good! I just love how you're looking at Tris through someone elses eyes. This should totally be a novella!!! And what do you mean unusual writing style??? It was great ;)
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